prop changes

in my new storyboard, the idea was that there was a mysterious book, that was worth a lot of money, because of time limits and everything i've changed it to a laptop bag, this also means i can add a lot more shots in because i can do shots of people taking the laptop out of the bag even though im sure that all the shots i've already done will fill up the two minutes easily

Opening test

testing out my idea for the opening the full audio track is actually exactly 2:01 minutes long so i could do the whole opening with no other audio, but i think that'd be boring so around 1 minute the song fades out and theres some conversation and a different track starts up.

Titles test and new script

Credits test first! this was kind of the image that i had in mind, its just a basic mock-up of what I'm going to do and testing out transitions and the best effects to use, it still needs tweaking slightly i don't think the "CCTV camera effect" is right i think it needs to be in black and white and maybe slightly jumpy, also the text isn't right i think I'll look for some different texts to use.

Script

i mainly changed my project so i could base it around music rather then speech, dialogue tends to let people down so I'm using as little as possible.

Shot 16: Close up on student sat in front of mysterious person - "I hear they play drums during services"

Shot 17: Close up on the mysterious person - "Only to those who can hear them"

this is the sign to let the student know he/she has got the right person.

Shot 20: high angled point of view shot on mysterious person, who looks up at the student and takes the book - "Pleasure doing business."

Changing Idea

after watching some other students videos and working out the time i had to do the project in i didn't look like i would get it done in time so I've changed how im doing it slightly, its the same plot same characters but from a totally different perspective, before it started with the two main good guys and there race to the shop how im changing it so that it is from the bad guys point of view, i've also given the over all story more of a plot in doing so.

my new plot is that the bad guys have stolen a very very valuable book, and intend to use it to get money from the government or owner of said book. i've now made the character who has stolen the book and the main good guy related, the good guy is aware of what his relative is up to but is completely oblivious to the fact that his relative is aware of what he knows and that they're watching him

the storyboard opposite is basically what happens before the original storyboard, in the very last shot you can see the good guy go on the computer, that would be where my original storyboard started but having watched other openings more closely and doing my test shots i think that my original idea isn't good enough and its also difficult to keep the clips shot while having credits mixed into them

i think seeing the bad guy before the good guys makes a much better hook as well.
one of the key things to my opening is music, after watching other peoples videos one of the huge flaws is that the audio quality of dialogue is terrible. my previous idea had a lot of speech in it and i had planned on getting a separate recording thing so i could film while recording the voice from close up but i couldn't find anything suitable so by changing my idea and using music as the base Audio i can use minimal dialogue to maximum effect, the only real speech in my knew idea is during the church scene when only 20 something words are said between two people before music starts back up again and credits start again.
Our teacher said that the feedback they got from the exam board last year was that the credits weren't creative enough...so i went all out.

most of my new idea is set indoors, with no particular time of day this is so that im not restricted with time limits, i have a paper round that i do and it takes an hour by the time i get home its already dark and im busy for a lot of weekends around deadlines so by setting it in doors i can film whenever i have time. i also moved some scenes to school because i can film in school hours as well by doing that and it gives me plenty of time to edit and re-film if necessary.

Below is my rough test shots for my previous idea, i think its alright, but it just doesn't feel right to me and i don't think it flows. one of my pet peeves is when videos don't fit together very well.

Storyboard new shots to be added

between shot 10 and 11, characters just joined together, shot of them running down a path together, in time with music, cut sections out of the shot so they're running away jumps slightly giving a jumpy effect.

Rought Script

Shot 20
First dialogue: Character B – Noise on impact with lamp-post
Shot 21
Character A Sighs when she realizes that character B has run into the lamp-post
Shot 22
Character A Helps character B up while laughing
“thats gonna hurt in the morning”
Shot 24
Character A checks her watch
“Woah! The time!”
Shot 26
Both characters run to shop, get there and find it closed
Character A: “I knew it!, that’s your fault.”
Character B: “you were the one who dragged me out!”
Shot 27
(from inside the shop so the audio is slight muffled)
Character A: “you ran into the lamp post!”
Character B: “Touché”
Shot 28
(long shot)
Character A: “Ugh, come on lets just go home”
Shot 29
(conversation while walking away from shop)
Character B: “we could always get some tomorrow”
Character A: “Nah, i just fancied some now”
Character B: “we could go to morri-ways”
Character A: “To expencive.”
Character B: “what a waste of time that was!”
Character A: “ exercise is good for you.”
Character B: “Not after school on a Monday ni-
(insert noise/scream both turn around)
Shot 35
Character A: “oh thats not good...” (whispered to each other)
Character B: “what do we do?”
Character A: “run” (shouted)

Production company logo finished

took about 10 minutes to put together in sony vegas, i dont know whether to put any sound effects on it, i probably will eventually though

Storyboard edit

Production company logo.

this is the Logo that i came up with originally, this is just a basic still image version of it though, the images below will all be part of a movie symbol that I'll edit together in Sony Vegas at home

i called the company "Jet productions" because one of the big things local to me is Frank Whittles invention of the jet engine, the spiral above goes in the centre of the circle below and will rotate continuously while the text appears

Storyboard Edit

im taking one of the shots out because it doesnt make sense and it would be more effective to not have it in at all.

Characters

I'm getting some friends from out of school to be my actors, this is both good and bad because it means i can only film outside of school hours but also means that I have to organise dates a head of time so filming will be more organised and i can time manage better. the characters i have in mind are as follows
Character A - Charlotte Bradshaw, the main character
Character B - Ieuan Pope, the second main character, the one who runs into the lamp-post
Character C - Emily Jones, the victim
Character D - Gillian Gamble, one of the bad guys
Character E - Darius O'Neill, bad guy/shop owner

all of them have agreed to be in it, so I'm organising days that we can all meet up and do the filming

Sherlock Holmes

I've mentioned before that i want to use a mystery novel (preferably Sherlock Holmes) in one of my shots, this was perfectly timed because the new Sherlock Holmes film came out and me and a friend went to see it. it has both my genres in it + action and the very first opening scene was a chase scene in which the characters identity is hidden just like my opening.

because its the first movie some people don't know what the actor who's playing Holmes looks like, me being one of these people i didn't know what was going on in the opening, to me it looked like a scruffy man being chased by the police but it turned out to be Holmes running in front of the police to stop the main bad guy from doing something. I'm doing something like this in my opening, I'm making the "Good guys" look like the bad guys

the mystery element of the film kept me on the edge of my seat through-out, and by the end i was actually convinced the main bad guy could use magic, then all was revealed by Holmes towards the end only to be left with a cliff hanger ending about a second bad guy that made appearances in the film. there are a lot of times when your sat watching thinking "what on earth is Holmes doing" and then at the end he shows you why he did it, it keeps the audience hooked.

the comedy was clever, one of my favourite parts that made me laugh was a giant french bad guy who's out to get Holmes picks up a huge hammer used on making a ship, Holmes grabs a tiny hammer and there's a long shot allowing the audience to see the difference in size between both Holmes and the bad guy and there hammers, in frustration Holmes just throws his hammer at the man and does no damage what so ever and ends up almost getting squished by the boat-in-progress.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QUQbmFAE5WI

the hammer scene starts at 1:43 in the trailer above, the embedding was disabled.
the trailer below is slightly different but i could embed it so i'll post both

mood board

a mood board of some things that i am including in my opening and where i've taken idea's from.
things i've circled in read:
Sherlock Holmes - mystery novel, possibly being used as a prop in within the first 10 shots
Hot fuzz swan chase - a funny chase scence, same comedy im using in my opening
Lamp post - Lamp post scene
closed sign - closed sign of the shop in my opening
Hot fuzz sunglasses - Main point is the sunglasses that the bad guy will actually be wearing despite there being (hopefully) little to no sun

Storyboard

i did my storyboard completely on photoshop and did each shot in a separate file so that if i wanted to change anything i could just make a new file, finish it then drag it over the top of the old one and I'd still have the original image to show changes.

in the 18Th shot, i drew in the hoodies that the characters will be wearing. hoodies to hide there identity this is so that there is enigma codes as to who the main characters are and what they are doing, the black hoodies also make the audience think that the characters are up to no good when actually they are the good guys.